Amazing work so far. love the amount of interaction especially with the phone even though some things buttons don’t do anything (yet?).
I love the story so far and the H-scenes are pretty good as well so keep it up. now on to the critique, don’t worry nothing too major.
1, The English Grammar is somewhat bad at some if not most times throughout the story.
2, Flashing visual glitches mainly when using the phone or any hardcoded events using the phone.
3, No way of seeing character stats i.e. (Affection, Submission and other stats) unless you get to the end of Chapter 1.
4.I believe TheRealArma has told you the remaining problems so I wont list them as I’m sure you are already aware.
Other then these four problems the game is very good and you can expect my support and feedback moving forward.
Have a great rest of your day/evening/night and I hope my little humble review helps you fix some minor issues.
Hello, and thank you! I'm thrilled to hear that you're enjoying the story and scenes. Now, let's address your points:
1. I'm aware of this issue, and I've already made significant textual corrections in version 0.1.1 (although I'm not sure which version you played). Rest assured, I'll continue to work on improving this aspect.
2. This is new feedback. Could you please provide some images, videos, or more details to help me pinpoint the issue? You can share them on Discord (the link can be found above). The framework used in the game isn't created by me, as you can see in the game credits, but I'll certainly investigate it!
3. Vertical bars in the characters' stats app are already on my Trello board for the next chapter. I appreciate your input on this!
4. Yes, they are on my to-do list as well! Although I haven't had much time to think them through yet.
Once again, thank you very much for your feedback. Your reports will only serve to enhance the overall gaming experience for everyone!
Find it hard to believe that this is your first game with how good things are. For starters the story is interesting and kind of makes me regret checking this out when there's only one chapter available, I didn't want it to end just yet!
The renders and lighting are also great! Usually the first few chapters of some games have a little too much bloom or characters look as though they're made of plastic or something. I didn't notice anything like that though.
Ontop of all that, the characters all actually feel different, too often do games come out where everyone looks different but all seem to have the same personality and mannerisms.
As though all that isn't enough, the options menu gives more options than the vast majority of VN's I follow! Off the top of my head, I think the only comparable one is Stormside. I do kinda wish there was also a little audio cue for the Glitches when you have the hint option enabled, they can be easy to miss at times. Though, I did find 75% of them so I suppose I can't complain too much.
Some minor things I noticed during my play through:
I think that something was accidentally overlooked during the intro.
Lucy mentions that she was surprised she was one of MC's emergency contacts when he set them up when buying his new phone. Then shortly later Lucy notes how when he was found after the accident his phone was broken.
If his phone was broken the hospital staff wouldn't be able to access his emergency contacts, right? Unless he listed them as one to the doctor to have on file themselves after an appointment or something.
When Lucy, Anya and MC are sitting down to eat pizza and MC talks about repaying them Lucy is the one speaking but the render is of Anya with her mouth open to speak.
Thank you very much! It is indeed my first game, but I have high standards, and my inspirations come from some of the big players in this genre! :-)
To be honest, I personally believe that my later scenes look a bit better than the first ones. I started with the first scene and improved as I progressed, which reflects my growing experience over the scenes, but that's my opinion on it. :)
I hope to start working on Chapter 02 next week! An audio cue for the hints is a perfect suggestion – I can't believe I didn't think of it myself. It should be something very subtle, but I think it will find its way onto my Trello board. Thank you very much for the idea!
Regarding the minor issues you've mentioned, I'm genuinely impressed that you've noticed these details. You must have a keen eye for every little aspect of the story. I'll take a closer look and make the necessary fixes.
Thanks mate! I just wanted to make this first release as perfect as possible (still space for improvements though). Wish you the best and stay healthy too!
I indeed started to play games like Once in a Lifetime, Ripples and Eternum before I decided to make my own novel. These were also my inspirations, I try to reach their quality level. Ripples is honey select 1 though, I'm using 2.
Thank you! There will be more! Be sure to rate it and consider supporting if you enjoyed it! This will always be appreciated and help us investing more time into it!
Without spoiler too much, could also still be subject to change. I plan to have them include MC from know on (if MC wants that), first scene between them was a reason to get MC involved with a lesbian girl and her bisexual benefit-friend. Hope this answers your question!
Firstly: You will get asked in the second chapter by Amber if you want to do something, but if you decline the request that will stop the involvement.
Also, I had an idea today, but it's not fully thought through yet: An option in the menu to disable the lesbian content fully (like the disabling NSFW option). For the people who don't like it which includes only minor changes to the classroom and toilet scene and less than 10 new images.
Oh, one of the girls is actually lesbian and not bi--what is the plan there with regard to her relationship with the player character if you don't mind spoiling?
Hi and sorry for the late reply, I missed your comment! They are a various amounts of reasons why people think they are this and that. The lesbian girl may have just tried sexual interactions with females and thinks that she is lesbian. The player also have some... let's say convincing arguments to make her think about it again. (Let's see what reason it will be in the final game, but that are our plans at least.)
Omg what a start! Without a doubt I think it can be one of the best games on this platform, the animations and sounds you add make the experience much better, continue on this path that looks very good
I should actually read f95 threads before asking questions. Thanks for your time. It's not a deal-breaker anyway and it sounds like it all involves the protagonist or leads to it so that's cool by me.
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Amazing work so far. love the amount of interaction especially with the phone even though some things buttons don’t do anything (yet?). I love the story so far and the H-scenes are pretty good as well so keep it up. now on to the critique, don’t worry nothing too major.
1, The English Grammar is somewhat bad at some if not most times throughout the story.
2, Flashing visual glitches mainly when using the phone or any hardcoded events using the phone.
3, No way of seeing character stats i.e. (Affection, Submission and other stats) unless you get to the end of Chapter 1.
4.I believe TheRealArma has told you the remaining problems so I wont list them as I’m sure you are already aware.
Other then these four problems the game is very good and you can expect my support and feedback moving forward. Have a great rest of your day/evening/night and I hope my little humble review helps you fix some minor issues.
Hello, and thank you! I'm thrilled to hear that you're enjoying the story and scenes. Now, let's address your points:
1. I'm aware of this issue, and I've already made significant textual corrections in version 0.1.1 (although I'm not sure which version you played). Rest assured, I'll continue to work on improving this aspect.
2. This is new feedback. Could you please provide some images, videos, or more details to help me pinpoint the issue? You can share them on Discord (the link can be found above). The framework used in the game isn't created by me, as you can see in the game credits, but I'll certainly investigate it!
3. Vertical bars in the characters' stats app are already on my Trello board for the next chapter. I appreciate your input on this!
4. Yes, they are on my to-do list as well! Although I haven't had much time to think them through yet.
Once again, thank you very much for your feedback. Your reports will only serve to enhance the overall gaming experience for everyone!
- DP
I will give you a video of #2 right away on discord. thank you for the quick reply and as always stay safe.
Awesome, thank you and stay safe too!
Find it hard to believe that this is your first game with how good things are. For starters the story is interesting and kind of makes me regret checking this out when there's only one chapter available, I didn't want it to end just yet!
The renders and lighting are also great! Usually the first few chapters of some games have a little too much bloom or characters look as though they're made of plastic or something. I didn't notice anything like that though.
Ontop of all that, the characters all actually feel different, too often do games come out where everyone looks different but all seem to have the same personality and mannerisms.
As though all that isn't enough, the options menu gives more options than the vast majority of VN's I follow! Off the top of my head, I think the only comparable one is Stormside. I do kinda wish there was also a little audio cue for the Glitches when you have the hint option enabled, they can be easy to miss at times. Though, I did find 75% of them so I suppose I can't complain too much.
Some minor things I noticed during my play through:
I think that something was accidentally overlooked during the intro.
Lucy mentions that she was surprised she was one of MC's emergency contacts when he set them up when buying his new phone. Then shortly later Lucy notes how when he was found after the accident his phone was broken.
If his phone was broken the hospital staff wouldn't be able to access his emergency contacts, right? Unless he listed them as one to the doctor to have on file themselves after an appointment or something.
When Lucy, Anya and MC are sitting down to eat pizza and MC talks about repaying them Lucy is the one speaking but the render is of Anya with her mouth open to speak.
Hi there!
Thank you very much! It is indeed my first game, but I have high standards, and my inspirations come from some of the big players in this genre! :-)
To be honest, I personally believe that my later scenes look a bit better than the first ones. I started with the first scene and improved as I progressed, which reflects my growing experience over the scenes, but that's my opinion on it. :)
I hope to start working on Chapter 02 next week! An audio cue for the hints is a perfect suggestion – I can't believe I didn't think of it myself. It should be something very subtle, but I think it will find its way onto my Trello board. Thank you very much for the idea!
Regarding the minor issues you've mentioned, I'm genuinely impressed that you've noticed these details. You must have a keen eye for every little aspect of the story. I'll take a closer look and make the necessary fixes.
Thanks for bringing them to my attention!
- Panda
The time, love and effort you put into this really shows. I can't wait to see future updates, hope things go by smoothly for you!
Thank you for the kind words, I really appreciate it! I will start on chapter 2 as soon as every bug is squashed!
Great game looking forward to see future updates .
Thank you very much! Consider leaving a review! :-)
mad potential , great avn
Thank you! Also greatly appreciate the review!
Just wanted to say thanks for adding a lesbian toggle wish more games did that. Enjoyed the game and I'm looking forward to more.
Thank you and your welcome! Enjoy the new scene with Amber if you haven't already!
Nice game definitely going to w8 for the coming updates fam hope you didn't over work yourself and stay healthy :D
Thanks mate! I just wanted to make this first release as perfect as possible (still space for improvements though). Wish you the best and stay healthy too!
Happy to hear! I will continue to do my best. Thank you!
Let's goo
Thank you for the rating mate! Appreciate it a lot!
Seeing the images im getting ripples feeling
Do you have inspiration in games like Eternum and ripples?
Hey!
I indeed started to play games like Once in a Lifetime, Ripples and Eternum before I decided to make my own novel. These were also my inspirations, I try to reach their quality level. Ripples is honey select 1 though, I'm using 2.
Hope that answers your question!
Mate this was incredible. You have some skills and a great imagination. Can't wait for more. Such a great game. Cheers
Thank you! Happy that you enjoyed it, consider leaving a review! Cheers!
I need more of this
Thank you! There will be more! Be sure to rate it and consider supporting if you enjoyed it! This will always be appreciated and help us investing more time into it!
Hello! The lesbian content in version 0.1 included one girl licking another before she helps you out, it is also skippable.
what's the lesbian content going to be like in future updates?
Without spoiler too much, could also still be subject to change. I plan to have them include MC from know on (if MC wants that), first scene between them was a reason to get MC involved with a lesbian girl and her bisexual benefit-friend. Hope this answers your question!
Firstly: You will get asked in the second chapter by Amber if you want to do something, but if you decline the request that will stop the involvement.
Also, I had an idea today, but it's not fully thought through yet: An option in the menu to disable the lesbian content fully (like the disabling NSFW option). For the people who don't like it which includes only minor changes to the classroom and toilet scene and less than 10 new images.
What do you guys think about the idea?
Edit: Implemented in version 0.1.1!
Oh, one of the girls is actually lesbian and not bi--what is the plan there with regard to her relationship with the player character if you don't mind spoiling?
Hi and sorry for the late reply, I missed your comment! They are a various amounts of reasons why people think they are this and that. The lesbian girl may have just tried sexual interactions with females and thinks that she is lesbian. The player also have some... let's say convincing arguments to make her think about it again. (Let's see what reason it will be in the final game, but that are our plans at least.)
Hope that answers your question!
Thank you for the kind words, I hope so, too! Very happy to hear that you like the game! I will continue to do my best, that's a promise.
Is pregnancy an option?
Yes, there will be pregnancy in the game and if you don't want it just disable impregnation in the options menu.
Its really good
Very glad that you enjoy it, thank you!
Good start. Don't know how deep these choices will run, can I avoid the lesbians going forward?
Thanks! Yes this will be avoidable, no worries.
I should actually read f95 threads before asking questions. Thanks for your time. It's not a deal-breaker anyway and it sounds like it all involves the protagonist or leads to it so that's cool by me.
Sure thing! Good to hear and no worries, as long as time allows I will try to answer every question.
incredible start. 10/10.
Thank you very much for the feedback! Glad I could develop something that people find that good!
Is this (or will be) harem or single route?
Hello! You can have any girl you like in the later versions, at the same time!
oh, ty wanted to make sure
Your welcome!
pretty good.
Thank you!
Good stuff.
Thank you, glad you like it!